This device (phone) is broken.
Write about a time you broke something!
OR
Imagine that you broke your device or phone and describe how it happened.
To do this, I will try to:
- Start sentences with different words
- Start sentences with capital letters
- Use other punctuation (check the ladder)
- Show my feelings
- Use my senses to describe
- Include strong verbs
BROKEN
I sprinted down a big long hall in the mall, clutching my Uncle’s new phone in my right hand and some birthday wrapper in my left. I had to get it to my Uncle's house for his birthday. I sprinted home. When I got there I opened the door and ran inside. I jumped on my bed and started wrapping up the new phone. When I had got to his house, I came in the gate, opened the door, then the other door and tripped up on to the wooden hardwood floor. Ouch! I said and hop up rubbing my head but the cell phone had dropped and SMASH!!!! The cell phone had cracked. “Great gotta buy another one.”
I like the word clutching. Great job keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteI like your work on your broken phone keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have put you where rubbing your head and the phone dropped. Lets hope you don,t do it again. Keep up the amazing work
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